I've written a song :) Opinions?

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JayceeStar

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I have a friend who is in a band, who have a record label and are becoming very successful...they should be supporting The Hoosiers and One Night Only on tours next year...and they were at a party with Scouting for Girls last week! (I was rather jealous!)
He's just sent me a demo of a song he wrote, and reminded me of how much I used to enjoy songwriting....so I had a go at writing another. Something happened a few years ago that still bothers me today, and I thought I could write about it.
It may be awful, it's only taken 20 minutes, but let me know what you think :) After the second chorus, it gets kinda awful....haha!

You tell me to forget it, it’s gone and in the past
That if I can’t, things with us will never last
But it’s easy for you to say
That things are said and done
Easy for you to say
That I’ve always been “the one”

But how do I know, when you’re out at night?
Do I have to worry, or are things alright?
Are you with her, or just out with the guys?
Should I be smiling, or wiping tears from my eyes?

Because sometimes, I don’t know
Why I gave you one more chance
You say, you were wrong, and
You’re glad I took you back
But though I love you
You caused me so much pain
And things between us will
Never be the same


You tell me to forget it, you made a huge mistake
You never meant to cause me so much heartbreak
But it’s easy for you to think
That I can just move on
Easy to tell me
What you did was wrong

So don’t get mad, when I ask who you’re with
Or when I won’t give you another kiss
I just need to know, the feelings are gone
That you really mean, I’m “the one”

CHORUS

I’ll never forget it, but if you can prove
That I mean more, than she does, to you
Things may change
And I may move on
But it still won’t change
That what you did was wrong

CHORUS

So please just listen
To what I have to say
And don’t get mad
Or try to push me away
Just tell me you love me
You’ll never do it again
You don’t get flowers
Without any rain....

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And me its really good.:)
I used to be in a band and write songs :)
 

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Awww lovely lyrics, will make a fabulous song :))
 
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